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QLeft Okita spits blood and kneels during the battle. Tuberculosis was destroying him. But even in a destitute situation, Okita laughs daringly. After all, his dying place is where he feels alive the most. From "Shinsengumi Rinpuden." QRight


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"Shinsengumi Rinpuden" Scriptwriting

Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...Hm, this is tricky. What should happen next?


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Yuyuko, how's the script going?


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Oh, hello, Fumi-senpai.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
I've brought you some tea and sweets from Tamao.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Thank you, you didn't have to.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
...Looks like you've having a hard time with the script.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I'm sorry. The deadline is coming up, but...it's not going so well.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Why don't we have some of the sweets I brought and take a break?


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
But the deadline...


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Driving yourself into a corner isn't going to help you come up with any good ideas.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...I guess so.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Whew... Tamao-senpai's tea is delicious.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
You finally look like yourself again.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I'm sorry for worrying you.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Heh heh, don't mention it. It's part of my job as your senior.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Hey, Yuyuko. Is there anything I could help with?


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Fumi-senpai...


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Scriptwriting isn't my expertise, but talking about it might be able to give you some hints.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...You're right. Mulling over it by myself isn't going to get me anywhere.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Then could I have you read this first? I'd like to hear your opinion.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
No problem. Let me have a look.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
I only did a quick skim, but this is quite good.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Especially this scene where they enter Ikedaya. I can't help but empathize with Kondo's sense of duty.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Seeing someone struggling for their beliefs always gets me fired up.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Thank you. But the problem comes after that...


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
...Hm? It's blank from the second half, I see. So right before the Boshin War begins?


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Yes, exactly. Right after the restoration of government to the crown and they lost their support.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I can't seem to figure out how the squad members must've felt facing that battle after losing the cause they'd been fighting for.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
How they felt upon their destruction.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
I see. That does seem tricky.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
But... I think I might be able to help.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Huh?


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
In other words, the story of the Shinsengumi romanticizes destruction. The beauty of their deaths and how they felt at the moment.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
The feelings toward a glorious death that can only come after a loss. I—no, WE should know that feeling very well.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...Feelings toward a glorious death.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Oh, I see what you mean... You're right, I am well aware of that.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Sounds like you got it.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Thank you, Fumi-senpai. Thanks to you, I can see the path. Let me get back to work.

Yuyuko's Shinsengumi

Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Sorry for the wait! Here's the script for "Shinsengumi Rinpuden"!


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Finally.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
Well? Are you satisfied with how it turned out?


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Yes, somehow... I did what I could.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Can I have you two read it? I'd like to hear your thoughts on it.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
Yes, of course!


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Sure, I'll have a look.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...What do you think?


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
It's brilliant... Better than I expected.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
I was especially touched by the attitudes of the squad members in the second half when they lost their cause, but still stuck to their beliefs.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Yes, it's a nice contrast from the fighting for their cause in the first half. A great composition.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...Thank goodness. I struggled over that part the most, so I'm happy it got across.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
What the squad members were thinking when facing the battle after losing their cause...


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I couldn't write the second half when I didn't know how they felt. But I understood after talking to you, Fumi-senpai.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
You could even say the real story begins after their loss. There are things you'd only notice after losing your cause, honor, and everything.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
Things you'd only notice after a loss. ...Don't tell me—


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Yes, it's the same as us back then.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
It could've been our very last stage. That's why we were able to face that stage with a fleeting brilliance.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
My feelings back then overlapped with the squad members' feelings... And then lines started coming out one after another.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
I see... Did you also overlap with Okita Soji when writing his last moments?


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...Oh, you noticed. It could be because that's my role, but I put a lot of attention to that scene.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
(Okita Soji)
"Kondo-san, I no longer fear death. My mind has been made up long ago."


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
(Okita Soji)
"But that was for a death on the battlefield and not on my sickbed."


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
(Okita Soji)
"O how I loathe this illness... I also want to fall together with the squad."


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Place of death... I wrote it while thinking of the stage at that time.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Even if I hadn't stood up on that stage...I would've felt there's no use regretting.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
I see. Okita Soji's rare display of vulnerability and tears is because you've entrusted your feelings to the role.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Yes... But after I re-read it, I felt embarrassed because there's too much overlap between me and Okita Soji.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
And on top of that, I'm playing this role. ...Hmm, maybe I should re-write this.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
Not at all. I think it's very fitting and turned out great.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Y-You think so? ...Thank you.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
I should be the one to thank you for the wonderful script.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...Phew, I feel like a weight's been lifted off my shoulders. I've finally be released from duty as well.


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
Hold on a minute, Yuyuko. Why are you acting like you've finished? This is where it all begins.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Huh?


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
Yes, let's make copies of the script for everyone and go over the script together.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
What? Right now?!


Fumi (icon) Fumi:
You've written such a good script, so of course we want to hurry and come up a worthy performance.


Tamao (icon) Tamao:
I can't wait to see how the roles will turn out.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
...Ngh, if my seniors say so, I suppose I must also put my heart into it.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I'll do my utmost to perform the best Okita Soji.

Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I know it's partly because I wrote the script, but Okita Soji has become a role I feel really strongly attached to.

Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
Man, I had such a difficult time with the Shinsengumi script. The stage back then was also a tough time, but this was a different kind of rough.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
I honestly don't know what I would've done if Fumi-senpai hadn't given me advice.


Yuyuko (icon) Yuyuko:
But now that it's finished, it's become a good memory. "Shinsengumi Rinpuden" has turned into an irreplaceable piece for me.

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